tonight the rain becomes the earth
falling from hidden spaces in the sky and swollen clouds
i hear it make mud of dirt, and lovers of friends
and ask, quiet, where are you going but down?
im not all there in the head
youre not all there in the head, my mother says
im not all there in the head i repeat
sometimes im there in my toes and fingers and heart as well
and now - in this downpour moment- i lie on the street
so warm that i think well thats where loves gotten to
but where is your shirt n? oh someplace else
and is that a light flickering in the house across the road? hide!
i rush in soaken with rain i watched fall (like stars)
am i poetic enough yet, yet?
leaving rain-prints on the carpet but mother wont mind
mind you she never minds anything if its mine
but then it stops a quick shut-eye stop
(i wonder) is it dew now that it sits like jewels upon the grass?
the wind is lovely in my ear, voice like rushing water
no not down; through, through.














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Humanity needs to look at serious issues in terms of how they will better society, not whether their god will disown them.
It's time to get serious.
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Ever drifting down the stream--
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But there is no waiting to see if a poem is good. The only person who's approval matters is yourself, and if you posted it on here, then clearly it was good enough for you.
He who forever seeks the approval of others is failing to live the life he deserves. Each of us are our own and on our own we must learn to love ourselves.
youre not all there in the head, my mother says
im not all there in the head i repeat
sometimes im there in my toes and fingers and heart as well"
i love that part! ♥
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"i hear it make mud of dirt, and lovers of friends"
"leaving rain-prints on the carpet but mother wont mind
mind you she never minds anything if its mine"
hope you don't mind:
i think there is a typo after shirt: "but where is your shirt n?"
also, did you mean to repeat "mind"? almost seems like the second line should start with "she never..."
This was a nice piece. I hope you startup and continue writing poetry. Rework this one since you seemed to have some doubts that it's any good because it was easy to write. But I don't think the ease or difficulty should determine it. All my poems come out in a flurry of a few minutes. Then I go back and pick at it.
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