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see my hair dance wild as wind-strings jerk it about//hear the ocean-wind heave itself against us all- crashing into our eyes and mouth//feel the winter-wind brush our skins in summer//then inhale the heaviness of air and sink through the dirt- because darling, you don’t deserve god’s beautiful violence.

(it drags the tree by its leaves saying kiss your trunk, kiss it and it does; releasing with a snap. the other trees flitter-flutter violently, crying within the cacophony of rain on concrete. white stars fall where light exists, and only sound where it disappears. the sky -the colour of sunburnt skin- watches it all with hunger. and then a moment we are swallowed. gumtrees, rain, earth; we are all night sky now. but our eyes open and the rain is no more, dew on grass. and the wind is no more, only breath.)
i let the storm soak through until it ran down in rivers down my skin. never leave, i ached, the world is ours in moments like this. then the wind made promises it wouldn't keep in my ears.
and the storm was no more, only me.
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Kaeldra-1 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2009
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kittifer Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2009
Your poetry is like your photographs - stunning.
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therealluke90 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2009
Hey there u are like my hero ur pics are like magic and the wrds u put up are jus as beautiful LOL email me luckyace7129@aol.com
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mylovebattlefield09 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2009
The imagery in this is superb. Everything is spoken in angry, hushed words that can rise to a scream, then fall down to no more of a breath.
I favorite this for the sound.
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AVolatileCalm Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2009
because darling, you don’t deserve god’s beautiful violence. wow...
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dancingtrees Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2009
wow, that was exhillarating to read!
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OHrealite Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009
how do you do it?
your gifted, you know that?
I've never met anyone- still haven't- that is about as talented as you.

your gonna go places, darling.
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wiccalaura Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
amazing... it can picture the exact feeling of a storm, and it's so poetic...
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PaintingWithWords Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009
You're too talented dude! everything you do is beyond beautiful. Your photography is breathtaking and your prose and poems are just... insanely gorgeous. stay amazing :]
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darnfancylettuce Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009
Ha I never read anything posted on Deviantart. Your stuff is the only stuff I read. One time a piece showed up in my messages and I read the first line and was hooked. Now I get excited whenever I see a photo or a piece of writing posted by you.

I mean damn, your writing gives me chills. I envy you in so many ways.
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iPawed Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
This could very well make my heart race, if it weren't for the rather calming music I'm listening to. It's written with... maybe not emotion, it's not so much an emotion to me but a way of life you portray to me in this piece.

The life you put into this makes it real. It makes me feel that there is a storm about to break, if only in my head. I'm drowning and I'm freezing and I can taste the wet earth in my mouth.

I'm waiting for the violence of this piece to hit my house.
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february-night Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009
Ahhhh. I have never ever read a description of a storm quite like this one. They are amazing, aren't they? And you just totally make people see that with all the power of this. I know this sounds cheesy and stuff, sorry. xD But seriously. Incredible work!! Can't wait to see another writing submission from you, especially if it tops this. (Is that possible?)
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xianlove Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
love the imagery
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YEScommaNO Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2009
Oh my goodness.
I wish I could write like this.

You are very talented.
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ayesha-may Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2009
Your words take me some place else - some place I like. I don't know how to describe it... I feel as if i should just close my eyes and feel your words rather than read them.

:D thanks!:P
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Hapenapopapella Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2009   Photographer
You have a such a beautiful way with words. I envy you and your wonderful talents.
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:iconjustanotheranonymous:
it's amazing, I don't understand all of it since it's in english,
but still it is breathtaking :heart:
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soul-rose Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009
This is so beautiful. I wish I could write like that. -sigh- Oh well. That's the thing when you read others' work, you read what you haven't written ^_^
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LostWithinDreams Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009
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If I could ever write as great as you, then I'd be a pretty happy girl.
Totally breath-taking. I love it. :heart:
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NOLIFEqueen13 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009
this is an amazing piece which i happened to stumble upon when lurking through deviantart.

so i guess in a strange way i wanted to say thank you for posting this.

:]

you are very talented.
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Pretty-As-A-Picture Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2009   Photographer
thank you darling :heart:
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EvynC Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009
this is very pretty
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guitar-rock-star Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009   Photographer
This is great. Not to mention very fitting considering we're nearly being washed away from flooding here. :|
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Pretty-As-A-Picture Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2009   Photographer
oo same here. been raining for days!
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guitar-rock-star Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2009   Photographer
haha yep same, stupid North Queensland.
:[
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Pseudolution Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009
For a movie or something as a narration it sounds like it could almost work.

But to be honest in comparison to the rest of your work I'm sorry to say that this left me disheartened.

Needs a lot of improvement love, I don't know what it is about. And if it is personal that's great. But as anything I could happily call art....
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Pretty-As-A-Picture Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2009   Photographer
really? well it was just an experiment. i wrote it in my head, standing outside on my veranda last night.
it's art to me and i guess that's all that matters.
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dkl78594 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009   Photographer
Very nice wording and concepts. :)
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MopPit Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009
This is such a delicate contrast to what we hear on the news about the storms up your way.

I love it. Beautiful.
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PRETTiieMUSIC Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009
I absoloutely envy you. :(
Youre so talented at writing and photography. :)
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lX-Kiki-Xl Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009
I have been in a tornado, and I'm pretty sure that you captured my memory to perfection. I really enjoyed the imagery of it; but for some reason the flow got choppy somewhere in the middle. Past that, I adored it. You have some serious talent!
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Little-Miss-Priss Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009   Writer
very very well done. you are a very talented writer.
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seanfhocal Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009
*speachless*
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Bumbillbee Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009
Amazing, you can write down all the feelings when one gets when there is a storm :heart:
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enchanted-black-rose Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
"because darling, you don’t deserve god’s beautiful violence."

What a stunning line. :faint:
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HeiLong24 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009
Im gonna admit that I dont get it. The images confused me. I just woke up but I bet that even if I was awake, I still wouldn't get it hahaha
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nazag Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009  Professional Interface Designer
Beautiful, very beautiful. That makes me want to kiss you in the wind just near the tree, dancing for the excitement of the kiss. I can feel cold lips, while dirt is penetrates our hair.

This is the little break in running our hot home, probable in minds there is a hot shower, but neither the wind or the hot home can stop my kiss. Both are just making the moment more rousing.

Thank you for making me feel that.
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o--tebem--o Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009   Photographer
Different, I like it.
I really like the artist's comments too :D
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
How do you do it? :faint: :heart:
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MidnightMelodie Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009  Student General Artist
Amazing, awesome, splendid, visual, lovely. Great job.
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009   Writer
it drags the tree by its leaves saying kiss your trunk, kiss it and it does;

most definitely my favorite bit


xo!
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evelfin Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009   Photographer
your poetry is very amazing :heart:
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Maivale Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009
I don't understand how you can write so beautifully
srsly, everything you write just gets me. you are amazing.
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wiccanbabe Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009
W-O-W~ :heart: Your poetry is incredible!
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PirateCubes Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009   Photographer
my god thats beautiful!
i was hoping for another writing submission and i got one!
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Pretty-As-A-Picture Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009   Photographer
:heart:
thank you!!!!!
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PirateCubes Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009   Photographer
ha you're welcome.
i told you that on facebook as well. but yeah, i thought i'd tell you again (-:
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HollieArose Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009
ahh, your an amazing writer :)
i love your work v much.
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Pretty-As-A-Picture Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009   Photographer
and you're sweet. glad you liked it.
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