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she's a ghost of a girl in the mirror. dark hair tangles like weeds below her shoulders and cuts at grey eyes. harsh shadows don't leave her with a skeleton like she sometimes hopes, but she feels it in her mind. feels the sharp edges and the trembled fragility, the silent cry for another's flesh and that outward plea of don't break me. cold fingers make love to cold glass while the sky cries over and over for sun.

this afternoon death made to kiss her lips but missed. he'd come so close she now knows what nothing doesn't feel like and she cannot fear it. it's a blankness so removed from consciousness she cannot reach it with thought- but she had drowned in it and forever the extent of nothingness will stay with her. she shivers. she is wet, she is cold, but she breathes. hear her breathe, louder now than the wind outside.

the rain had witnessed them; two friends walking beneath an vast umbrella. legs bare and teeth bare in laughter. the rainclouds had swollen with envy, coughing and spluttering and gushing rainwater. above, beside, below the bridge. concrete beneath thick moss beneath the rush of rainwater beside the bridge had ushered her with a chhshhhh of water tumbling after water. and she had come with heavy feet light in her mind while the rainwater still called her forward, painting upon her a notion of coolness against her ankles as she ran. but it had lied, the ground had disappeared suddenly beneath her and she came crashing. time slowed and she felt air struggle to hold her upright until the deafening thunder in her head (concrete throwing itself at her) brought the
nothing
for a while
and then grey light again, blue dress at her waist, overexposed but she is in knots of herself, tasting stale moss and dirty water. thighs scratched, elbows grazed with red trickling down white forearms and a banging in her mind. she lies near jutting concrete out to pierce her had she fallen closer.

her angel has kept her from drowning and she lies beside her in the almost grave almost crying. she is beautiful, the broken girl thinks. she had fallen too and if she had fallen the same way they'd both had drowned beautifully and alone with one another. the world would have mourned but atleast they'd be together ever after. the angel murmurs, the girl reaches to the heat at her head and gasps, her head reaches her fingers much before it should and she fits her entire hand around the throbbing growth.

they lay in the rush of rainwater unfeeling before crawling upward, homeward.

hear her breathe. because for a moment there you couldn't.
but only a moment

if i die it will be with rainwater in my lungs, tide claiming my breath or ocean stealing my body

because i have this tie to the earth i can't explain
i was born in water and i will die in it

(i will capitalize this if you like)
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:iconersatz-moon:
ersatz-moon Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
reminds me of plath
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initiate-infinity Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2011  Student General Artist
you are the reason i did not deactivate my account, even though i never watched you and just discovered your poetry today.
i was lurking, looking for a reason.
a reason for what, i'm not sure.
i just wanted someone to show me things.
thank you for showing me things.
thank you.
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner May 12, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
btw. [link]
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner May 12, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
you have a very unique style, my bow to you :)
if you're on facebook, I would like to invite you to my writers' group Spit It Out
keep going
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McGregsta Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2010
I used the 1st and 2nd paragraph slightly modified for lyrics

[link]

It's metal btw before you complain about your ears bleading
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wellwornwings Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
beautiful.
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medailon Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
i don`t like to write about dying, even though i did before and i was pretty good in it. but it reminds me of bed times in my life, so probably i`ll never write this way again. but still this was beautiful. one last thing- i do like author`s comment.
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SingingRiver Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2009
You are able to use words in such an artistic way, I really like your writings ^^.
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:iconthebodycomatose:
thebodycomatose Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2009   Writer
This is truly breathtaking. I'm speechless. :heart:
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licoricefactory Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2009
I love how you described death in such a way that is so poetic and artistic.
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DirtyDizzyD Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2009
every piece of your writing makes me feel sick with pain, makes me long for my biro, makes me relate____well done!!! i bow down to you:heart:
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Kaeldra-1 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2009
Your thoughts are so beautiful there's no compliment to do it justice.
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:iconbricksadd:
bricksadd Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2009
this made me cry, but in a very good way
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:iconthe-elly:
The-Elly Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2009   Digital Artist
did she die?
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Maivale Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2009
this one didn't get me =(
it's lovely, but... just doesn't hold the spark of your others. i'm sorry, i can't explain why.
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:iconmiss-disorientated:
miss-disorientated Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
beautiful but heart-wrenching...
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:iconkoronue:
Koronue Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2009
your words paint a lovely and tragic picture
your mind is amazing!!!
K
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:icondaethina:
Daethina Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2009
:O THIS IS MY LIFE! I love it so much!
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sweetwildlight Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
are you sure you're 16? bless your heart
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abbster2 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2009  Student Photographer
awesomeeee :)
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JaM-FaiRY Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
your imagery is amazing but I dont think I understood this as I did the other ones..lol maybe its me and the fact that Im staying up late at night actually it morning now..so maybe its that

I think Ill come back to this one

like I said amazing descriptions

x
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MarieHolly Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2009
they lay in the rush of rainwater unfeeling before crawling upward, homeward.

hear her breathe. because for a moment there you couldn't.

^ Ohh, that's beautiful :aww:
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heart-defectant-art Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2009  Student General Artist
i love this and more so i love the imagery i get reading line from line. You have such interesting ways to describe things like when you describe rain in this line, "cold fingers make love to cold glass while the sky cries over and over for sun". and "the rainclouds had swollen with envy, coughing and spluttering and gushing rainwater". I also liked the words you used to describe certain things, it was nice to see different things from the more common words im use to reading in other literature.
it is awesome, and you are a very talented writer.
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wiccalaura Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
it's amazing! love your writting style
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Loonie18 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2009
This is stunning! I love your work so much! Fantastic! This one is one of my favorites actually!
:heart:
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lX-Kiki-Xl Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2009
Cute. The last line definatly drives it home :heart: Ugh, I always look forward to your writing. Its always so gorgeous. This one was a little too fast paced for me, though. Still lovely <:
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heartfeltdreams Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2009
This is sooo great! I love how you put everything in detail
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PRETTiieMUSIC Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2009
i especially love the last line.
this is beautiful :]
and tragic.
but still beautiful.
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tasteslikehappy Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2009
Wow, this absolutely captivates me. Wonderful :)
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Meg0891 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2009
Absolutely amazing. Your writing is like constant music, it flows beautifully.
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all-good-are-gone Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2009
i wish i had a best friend like yours. sometimes i could do with being saved.

you are one lucky girl. send E my love, she truly IS an angel!
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mesreves24 Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
incredible. inspiring!
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headphoniac Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2009  Student General Artist
Beautiful imagery.
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KatMPhotography Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2009  Professional Photographer
WOW .... This is your finest writing yet... Emotionally charged...

You should be published, girl!!!

You're brilliant!


Can we have some images to go with this beautiful script....? xx
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DestinyxXxDancer Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2009
Wow, I love the sentiment behind this, beautiful :)
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ayesha-may Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2009
The last line is... the best! ha. The wonder that is my vocabulary ;P.
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:iconmegsmad:
megsmad Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2009
i love you.
and i love this.
i love the complicated confused sentences.

i wish i could write like you do.
but my writing is much to logical.

:heart: faved
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minimasake Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2009
c: I love your writing.
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:iconherckle:
herckle Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
amazing (:
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ShatteredLikeGlass Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2009
This is beautiful. I'd much rather you didn't capitalise it, simply because I think it looks better this way, and if you did this piece would probably lose something. Keeping it all in lowercase gives it more of a personal feel, I think.
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2009
magic. :heart:
[p.s. please don't capitalise it; i think it will take away some of the charm. that, or maybe i just hate capitals :shrug:]
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aliens-exist Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2009
death is a beautiful thing
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AVolatileCalm Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2009
Not your best, but still enjoyable :)

You will die in water.. The circle of life we become the grass.
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2009   Writer
sad but lovely


xo!
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him666foreverx Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2009
I wish i could write like you....
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like-summer-snow Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2009   Writer
This is just so beautiful, and so sad. You must see so many comments saying the same thing, but it's so true, and I'm horrible with words. If I could think of something else to say about this (or rather, find a way to put my thoughts into words) that hasn't been posted here, I would. :heart::+fav:
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MollyJoy Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2009
Lovely and sad...
I can't tell if you are feeling better

It reminds me a bit of Momento Mori (my favorite story on dA) the way death is personified.
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:icondistinguish:
distinguish Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2009
this was sort of but not inspired by you and rivers.
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hellodingo Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2009
You have the most incredible writing. I read and reread and reread everything you submit, with the utmost enjoyment and envy.
I particularly like the phrase "while the sky cries over and over for sun", such a beautiful and interesting way to describe rain.
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ChastitySeed Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2009
Absolutely beautiful
That's all I can say :heart:
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